Second Crusader Challenge
The Challenge:
Write a flash fiction story (in any format) in 100 words or less, excluding the title. Begin the story with the words, “The goldfish bowl teetered” These four words will be included in the word count.
If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional, and not part of the judging criteria), see if you can write the story in your own genre (eg if you’re a horror writer, write a horror story; a romance writer, a romance story, etc). (want to read more? visit Rachael Harrie’s Blog)
My Entry:
The goldfish bowl teetered
tumbled and toppled
Oh dear! Oh my!
bumbled and boppled
What to do? What to do?
flailing and flapping
grasp this! grasp that!
whirling and wobbling
I only made matters worse
smacking and smashing
off the table top
battered and bashing
The goldfish paniced inside
splishing and splashing
This way and that!
darting and dashing
I watched it dance, spellbound
coiling and circling
Round and round it went
Whirling and waltzing
Hypnotizing
mesmerizing
fascinating
captivating
Watching it
careen and plunge
Thwack!
Saturday, April 23rd 2011 at 06:07 |
Thanks for joining in the challenge!I'm starting up a 'Critiquing Crusaders' program, where participants in the Second Crusade can find other writers to exchange critiques with or form critiquing circles. If you're interested, come by The Kelworth Files to check it out!
Tuesday, March 29th 2011 at 14:04 |
So excited! Thank you! Thank you!
Tuesday, March 29th 2011 at 13:32 |
Lady Jai your entry will be moving on to the final round. Good luck! Gosh and ignore my spelling error in the previous post, yikes.
Monday, March 28th 2011 at 22:13 |
So cool! I was wondering how you knew it was shortlisted – just saw your tweet. 🙂
Monday, March 28th 2011 at 08:22 |
Hi Lady Jai! You're entry for the 2nd crusade challange has been shortlisted in the judging round. Great Job!
Sunday, March 27th 2011 at 06:10 |
Very intriguing entry! Great job :)Hugs,Rach
Saturday, March 26th 2011 at 20:39 |
Ooh, this is great! I love the sounds and rhythm.
Saturday, March 26th 2011 at 15:36 |
Nicely done is right! Great job – loved this!
Saturday, March 26th 2011 at 15:28 |
Thank you all so much! It was funt to try and get the vivid words to play well together and try and do a poem. Glad you all liked it!
Saturday, March 26th 2011 at 13:04 |
Not sure what happened to my comment just now, but anyway, I like your word choices. I got a vivid picture of what was going on in the bowl. The pattern of the words was smartly done.
Saturday, March 26th 2011 at 00:11 |
Great word choices. I think you and I are the only poetry entries. It was a great topic to write in poetry. Your sound words were awesome!
Friday, March 25th 2011 at 15:01 |
Really good job. The first poem I've seen so far. Love the sound words. I bet this sounds wonderful read aloud!
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 19:10 |
Great entry! 🙂 Love your choice of words. 😀
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 19:03 |
really good – lovely sounds and sights conjured – well done
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 16:21 |
Not only is this linguistically appealing, but visually as well.
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 15:35 |
I love this! Go you for turning it into a poem!
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 13:26 |
How fun, all those lively verbs. 🙂 Neat to make it poetry.
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 13:03 |
Very impressive! I have a hard time with poetry so this is doubly amazing =)
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 11:34 |
Love it! Very pb style 🙂
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 10:35 |
Great fun, well done!
Thursday, March 24th 2011 at 10:08 |
Very nicely done. 🙂 I love the sounds created in this piece.